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Separate Lives

I can still recall in which direction the wind blew
when we got caught on a sunny day with our feet hanging over the pier
the voice has now become silent and unrecognizable
it knew the directions I would have chosen
as I ran through the playground, not able to admit,
in the process of ever-changing mind
I've lost the letters he had written with a love delight
they had the best of intentions
they used to have much more meaning
half holding them to the chest
now I'd connect all the dots
and make sense out of the least important scratches
always surprised at how much the silence can deepen
to the point it can be perceived as pain
I took it all with me, without agreement
now this house is for sale
damned be our desires
should we feed our curiousity with what it could be like
can't stand on a cliff while being yelled at
leaving doesn't always make you a coward
it only shows we live in separate lives
I saw somebody else trying to get out
                               and I lent a hand.
©2009-2010 ~Natasek
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:iconrednightblitz:
that is deep.

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who says lifes easy?
i have come across many true artists and you r one of them.may god keep blessing you.
from my life i learnt to be more concered ,than usual people ,about my friends.seeing alot makes you like that.^^;
:iconnatasek:
thank you :hug:

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:iconrednightblitz:
your welcome :) :hug:

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who says lifes easy?
i have come across many true artists and you r one of them.may god keep blessing you.
from my life i learnt to be more concered ,than usual people ,about my friends.seeing alot makes you like that.^^;
:iconnathan-speaks:
Did you make a conscious decision when writing this piece to not use any punctuation, apart from the final full stop? It's very close to brilliant - there's just something missing, I can't quite put my finger on it...
:iconnatasek:
I can't really give you a good answer here... I wasn't thinking about it, it was all very spontaneous, and I usually don't use any punctuation anyway, I just felt like it was all finished and it would add something more if there was a dot. Thank you for reading and commenting! :hug:

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:icondiprivan:
Speechless.

:rose:

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Expect to be disappointed and you never will be.
:iconnatasek:
:blowkiss:
(thank you)

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Everyone wants to be found.
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:iconraininyourheart:
Oh, wow. This is a :+fav:.
Weird how much I can relate to that. If I'd have the gift to write such beautiful things it would be probably very similar to that...
Maybe it sounds strage, but: thank you! :)

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... I'll write sincerely yours and sign my name...
:iconnatasek:
wow, your poems would be nice to read! i can't believe you can relate so much, and i'm really glad you can, and thank you as well, for everything!! :heart:

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Everyone wants to be found.
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:iconbd5000:
That's a beauty, love the imagery and metaphors.

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